Business marketing script
(Proofreading & Copy editing)
Client Type: Small Business / Sales Team
Service Provided: Proofreading and Copy Editing
Focus: Tone, grammar, clarity, and audience engagement
original version:
Hello, my name is Sophie and I’m calling you today on behalf of TeleCom Solutions. We specialise in providing the best telecommunication packages for businesses of all size. Our tailored solutions ensure that you get the best value for your company, including faster broadband, reduced call rates and seamless customer support. Could I take a few moments of your time to tell you about are latest offer?
Copy edited version:
Hello, my name is Sophie and I’m calling from TeleCom Solutions. We help businesses like yours find cost-effective telecommunication solutions, such as faster broadband, reduced call rates and exceptional customer support. I’d love to quickly share our latest offer: would you be open to hearing more?
Proofread version:
Hello, my name is Sophie and I’m calling you today on behalf of TeleCom Solutions. We specialise in providing the best telecommunication packages for businesses of all sizes. Our tailored solutions ensure that you get the best value for your company, including faster broadband, reduced call rates and seamless customer support. Could I take a few moments of your time to tell you about our latest offer?
Editor’s Note:
This example shows how professional copy editing improves tone and persuasive quality. The original script was grammatically correct after proofreading but lacked polish and impact. I restructured the copy for smoother delivery, eliminated filler phrases, and introduced a more direct, engaging call to action. This is the kind of edit that helps a business sound clear, credible, and client-focused.
Clear writing builds trust.
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