Student essay - the industrial revolution (Proofreading & Copy editing)
Client Type: Sixth Form / Undergraduate Student
Service Provided: Proofreading and Optional Copy Editing
Focus: Clarity, sentence fluency, and grammar
This sample shows two levels of service:
Proofreading only: correcting spelling, punctuation, and basic grammar
Copy editing: refining sentence structure, improving transitions, and enhancing argument clarity
Original version:
The Industrial Revolution was a important period of change in britain, transforming society in numerous ways. One of the most significant impacts was on urbanization, as many peoples moved from rural areas to cities in search of work. However, this caused problems such as overcrowding and poor living conditions which led to the spread of disease. Governments response was often slow and innafective, leading to widespread suffering among the lower classes.
Copy edited version:
The Industrial Revolution marked a period of great change in Britain, significantly transforming society. One major impact was urbanisation, as rural populations migrated to cities in search of work. However, overcrowding and poor living conditions accelerated the spread of disease; the government’s response was often slow and ineffective, exacerbating the struggles of the working class.
Proofread version:
The Industrial Revolution was an important period of change in Britain, transforming society in numerous ways. One of the most significant impacts was on urbanisation, as many people moved from rural areas to cities in search of work. However, this led to problems such as overcrowding and poor living conditions which contributed to the spread of disease. Government response was often slow and ineffective, leading to widespread suffering among the lower classes.
Editor’s Note:
Academic work requires sensitivity to the student’s original ideas. This sample demonstrates both proofreading and deeper editing, with care taken to preserve the integrity of the argument while improving fluency and flow.
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